poem: silence shimmering
hidden lightning glows behind the distant clouds
one raindrop trembles at the tip of a leaf
nightfall drifts in through the open window
dim light, faded pigments on old photographs
wandering in long-forgotten memories
I linked this poem to the readwritepoem blog, where there is a weekly poetry “prompt” inviting people to submit poems on a new theme each week. This week’s theme was word fishing, “fishing” out one word from each of five poems from a favorite poet, and using those words to inspire creation of a new poem. (You can read other poets’ submissions on the theme at the blog too.)
The poems I fished from were some of my favorite haiku by Basho:
temple bells echo into silence
the fragrant blossoms remain –
a perfect evening!
heat shimmering
one or two inches
above the dead grass
lightning
heron’s cry
stabs the darkness
the mountain rose trembles
falling petal by petal –
waterfall’s thunder
on a withered branch
a crow alights –
autumn nightfall
first snow
barely enough to bend
the leaves of faded daffodils
falling sick on a journey
my dream goes wandering
over a field of dried grass
OK, so that’s seven poems, but I couldn’t bear to part with any of them, and of course as haiku they’re so short :-). From them, I selected the words silence, shimmering, lightning, trembles, nightfall, faded, and wandering, to inspire me in creating a new poem.
I like the way you chose seven Haiku and then fished two words for the title and those long forgotten memories…
I love haiku and these are beautiful. I particularly like the first and fourth where there’s what we’d call in English, a turn. I can’t remember the correct terminology.
Great way to go about it. Very neat.
Someday
The haiku you chose to use for inspiration are truly inspirational. No wonder your poem turned out so nicely. I especially liked the fourth line. Well done. Have a nice day.
I’ve read that haiku are supposed to contain a reference to the seasons and this seems very appropriately autumnal to me. Very nicely formed!
This is just lovely. “trembles at the tip of a leaf” is wonderful.
I adore this one. I can smell the rain, and the storm that’s coming or just ended.
One can get the feeling of a pinefully rainy night.
it does feel like late summer early fall…
i like how nightfall wanders the memories and stirs the leaves there
Soft and expressive… memories are like that. Loved it.