Comments for throws his words

Comment on poem: november roses by mysoul

mysoul — Mon, 21 Dec 2009 20:58:59 +0000

Glad to be reading you again.. Hoping all is well. and Yes, thats an Apt Haiku.

Comment on poem: november roses by Nancy

Nancy — Tue, 08 Dec 2009 17:06:00 +0000

I like this one a lot. Narrates an unexpected thing about Fall here.

Comment on in russia, birthday wishes you! by Natalia

Natalia — Thu, 29 Oct 2009 16:25:04 +0000

Hi, I’m Russian; I read your blog post, and I’d like to make some correction to the translation, if you don’t mind :-)
When you smile, everything becomes brighter.
When you appear, everyone is more cheerful!
Also it is simply wonderful, that you exist in this world!
And may all your wishes absolutely become true!!!

Thanks Natalia! It’s great to (finally) have a good translation :-)

Comment on poem: their journey withered by tamra at laughingdove

tamra at laughingdove — Mon, 26 Oct 2009 15:32:36 +0000

“their journey withered in inches” gives me chills. great work!

Comment on poem: their journey withered by poetryaboutart

poetryaboutart — Sun, 25 Oct 2009 18:51:10 +0000

I really love the title, especially the word “withered.” I think it would be great to call your unique cut-up haiku as “withered” haiku! You may have invented an entirely new genre! Were all the Basho pieces you selected all translated by the same translator?
–Therese L. Broderick

The haiku came from different collections with different translators. But since they were the translations that spoke most to me I suppose they might seem to have a common feel. — throwshiswords

Comment on poem: their journey withered by wayne

wayne — Sat, 24 Oct 2009 02:06:58 +0000

nicely done…thanks for sharing this

Comment on poem: their journey withered by nathan

nathan — Sat, 24 Oct 2009 00:33:29 +0000

This turned out wonderfully. The ending is lovely.

Comment on poem: their journey withered by Cynthia Short

Cynthia Short — Fri, 23 Oct 2009 03:47:20 +0000

Very lovely, each bit it’s own small gem.

Comment on poem: their journey withered by Tumblewords

Tumblewords — Thu, 22 Oct 2009 20:39:11 +0000

These are so very interesting, concise and perfectly haikuesque. I can see that you had far more fun than I and more talent, as well!

Comment on poem: their journey withered by davidmoolten

davidmoolten — Thu, 22 Oct 2009 19:54:58 +0000

I think the idea of using Basho haiku for this exercise was a very good one, as they have great energy in each of the words, which you have retained and transmitted deftly here, the final poem original and yet with a haiku-like brevity and natural focus.

Comment on poem: their journey withered by Donald Harbour

Donald Harbour — Thu, 22 Oct 2009 17:56:50 +0000

Dave, you’re back! Where have you been, stomping around the hills and valleys? I found the play of words in your poem pulling at my memories of living in the Colorado and Arizona mountains. Thanks for the ride and your fine effort.
Regards,
DH

It’s good to be back :-) There was a bit of hills and valleys but mostly just work work work. — throwshiswords

Comment on poem: their journey withered by Paul Oakley

Paul Oakley — Thu, 22 Oct 2009 16:00:27 +0000

You managed to keep a surprising amount of the feel of haiku in the more extended poem. Basho as a starting point certainly gave an advantage, but you had to fit everything in place intelligibly and artistically, which you managed very well.

Nice!

Comment on poem: their journey withered by gautami tripathy

gautami tripathy — Thu, 22 Oct 2009 15:53:34 +0000

You selected fine lines and did a great job. Terma Rima: psychedelic pajamas

Comment on poem: their journey withered by Julie Jordan Scott

Julie Jordan Scott — Thu, 22 Oct 2009 15:15:54 +0000

lovely… naturally, a fine choice of words to begin your morphing-into-a-dynamic poem. Great read… fine job.

Comment on poem: silence shimmering by Amzel

Amzel — Fri, 24 Jul 2009 14:06:02 +0000

Soft and expressive… memories are like that. Loved it.

Comment on poem: unlike things by Amzel

Amzel — Fri, 24 Jul 2009 14:03:57 +0000

I loved the similes and metaphors… made me smile… why can’t you be more like me!!! I laughed as the dogs danced with sparklers. Read it in Wordgrove and came here to read some more. Keep up the artistry.

Comment on extreme closeup! by Tom

Tom — Fri, 15 May 2009 00:20:48 +0000

pretty pretty pretty

Comment on extreme closeup! by ricercar

ricercar — Mon, 27 Apr 2009 19:08:43 +0000

Otak control? Where’s Ged?

Lovely photos. Lovely spring.

Comment on poem: unlike things by Crafty Green Poet

Crafty Green Poet — Fri, 17 Apr 2009 13:30:50 +0000

this is very clever and very readable…

Comment on poem: unlike things by ricercar

ricercar — Fri, 17 Apr 2009 06:31:14 +0000

Definitely deserves to be read out loud. I keep revisiting this poem, and my walls all have it memorized.